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 20th Apr 2007 18:20
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| You came to me as a tide of honey Sweet waves filling my harbor with passion So gently lapping on my lonely shore Clearing all scars of the others before. The sun overflowed and diamonds poured down Butterflies and birds brought color and song My secret tide pools all eddied and swirled With fluids that glide to my very core. Night brought fiery tempests of lust and love Pounding massive tsunamis to my womb Crashing violently against my beach With clattering sand and a rush of foam. Now that you’re gone I comb your ebb tide edge For pretty shells and shiny colored stones. | ||||||
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20th Apr 2007
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| Inspired Author Join Date: Feb 2007 Posts: 411
|  Re: For Him, Taken Too Young Simply beautiful ! |
 
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21st Apr 2007
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| Vintage Author  Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Not in Kansas Posts: 385
| Re: For Him, Taken Too Young Very, very well done! Terrific imagery....... |
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21st Apr 2007
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| Vintage Author  Join Date: Mar 2007 Posts: 2
| Re: For Him, Taken Too Young .... sailor delights... ty |
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23rd Apr 2007
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| Inspired Author  Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Eastern Pennsylvania Posts: 98
| Re: For Him, Taken Too Young PJ, I find myself drawn repeatedly to your sonnet. There is a beguiling sadness about it. |
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28th Apr 2007
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| mindspired Member  Join Date: Mar 2007 Location: Detroit Posts: 39
| Re: For Him, Taken Too Young poignant...breathtaking...sweetly emotional Nicely done...thanks for sharing it with us! |
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27th Sep 2008
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| Inspired Author  Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: New England Posts: 939
| Re: For Him, Taken Too Young A powerfully metaphoric poems with sweet musical lines to a cacophony, to resigned remembrance. This is real poetry at a high level. I think we can all identify with it.
__________________ "Its not easy, being green...but green's the color of Spring...it's beautiful, and I think it's what I wanna be." (Kermit the frog) |
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2nd Sep 2009
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| Moderator  Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Frolicking in the woods. Posts: 1,556
| Re: For Him, Taken Too Young Beautiful and echoing. Your words leave their traces in the minds of the reader. Thank you for sharing such touching words.
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