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 6th Jun 2008 11:04
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| She’s so tired of peering from a far when in reality, reality is you are just within arms reach But that still seems too far times like this Times like this she pictures...pictures of you and her vividly she sees, feels she’s close to your soul warmth emits in dreams even- like you’re closer than you are currently sleeping next to her she supposes doses of you haven’t really been enough to see anything especially the real that it is what it is that chick right there is where she wants to be but she’s slightly still... confused faintly removed– they’re present in the same room but the same groove don’t flow anymore, soboth persons move themselves, remove themselves in opposite directs go the show hasn't ended but intermission is lurking some of the audience is smirking, some are dying for the finale others are certain its circumstance in forever true romance and the players are hurting like flirting every-now-and-then scared to blurt in listen this is what I did, you hurt me and I hid, and I did 'bout same as you or worst negatives are we to let it live and relive and destroy us? You said...I said... Im worth it, you’re worth it Lets settle the fuss Make up and f*ck Talk on it later Relax, breath in some vapors and slump into the bed, right before we bow our heads and thank The All Mighty for this All we have now is now- embrace it with me.
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6th Jun 2008
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| Inspired Author  Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: In the cream Posts: 1,191
|  Re: Now Wow, very powerful. I can feel the hurt emanating from her....but, like most arguments, the amke-up is the best! Nice job! Keep it up!
__________________ Work like you don't need the money, love like you've never been hurt, and dance like you do when nobody is watching! |
 
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7th Jun 2008
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| Inspired Author  Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: New England Posts: 939
| Re: Now Poetry is such a flexible medium. The rhythms are subtle, formative. Your form here is powerful enough to deliver a feeling that is stronger than the individual words: it hurt a lot! Rejection to solitude is such a killer. But the redemptive hope in erotic fusion at the end was slowly and subtly emerging form the first line. One of the best poems on the site, IMHO.
__________________ "Its not easy, being green...but green's the color of Spring...it's beautiful, and I think it's what I wanna be." (Kermit the frog) |
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11th Jun 2008
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| Inspired Author  Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Crossville, TN Posts: 81
| Re: Now Left me speechless. wonderful.
__________________ The Raven's cry shall rise no more Tremors trembling shall cease And I one of the chosen four Shall finally rest in peace. |
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