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| Roses on the floor leading u to my room, with small circular candles dancing in the darkness just to show you the way, that makes you wounder is what waiting for you behind that crack open door. You take your steps with*<span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman'; line-height: 20px; font-size: 16px; ">curiosity, hearing light music with that arousing smell starting to feel hot under your panties already, there I am wearing my jeans and topless to give you the sexy view of my chest muscles and my hard stomach, the shadows of the big candles in the room dancing on my body.[/u] <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman'; line-height: 20px; font-size: 16px; "> [/u] <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman'; line-height: 20px; font-size: 16px; ">holding two wine glasses i say*[/u] <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman'; line-height: 20px; font-size: 16px; "> [/u] <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman'; line-height: 20px; font-size: 16px; ">"thirsty .... " i ask with a gentle smile[/u] <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman'; line-height: 20px; font-size: 16px; ">"thirsty and horny " u say with that shine in your eyes*[/u] <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman'" size="4;"><span style="font-size: 16px; line-height: 20px;"> [/u][/u] <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman'" size="4;"><span style="font-size: 16px; line-height: 20px;">you take the glass fro my hand closing the gap between us, u start drink the wine very slowly while looking to my eyes, i can see the lust in your wild eyes, you put the glass away and take mine too,*[/u][/u] <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman'" size="4;"><span style="font-size: 16px; line-height: 20px;"> [/u][/u] <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman'" size="4;"><span style="font-size: 16px; line-height: 20px;">I hold you between my arms strongly while u gasp softly, my right hand scanning your back while my left is grabbing you from your waste not letting go, you feel my erection being jailed by my jeans, you take a quick glance down and say[/u][/u] <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman'" size="4;"><span style="font-size: 16px; line-height: 20px;"> [/u][/u] <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman'" size="4;"><span style="font-size: 16px; line-height: 20px;">" seems like some is knocking the door to get out"[/u][/u] <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman'" size="4;"><span style="font-size: 16px; line-height: 20px;">" some one was waiting for you from long time" i say[/u][/u] <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman'" size="4;"><span style="font-size: 16px; line-height: 20px;"> [/u][/u] <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman'" size="4;"><span style="font-size: 16px; line-height: 20px;">you push your tight between my legs massaging me softly, I print soft kiss on your cherry waiting lips, then another, the kiss turn to a french while our t<span style="line-height: 16px; font-size: 13px; font-family: arial, helvetica, clean, sans-serif; ">ongues meet and dance.[/u][/u][/u] <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman'" size="4;"><span style="font-size: 16px; line-height: 20px;"><span style="line-height: 16px; font-size: 13px; font-family: arial, helvetica, clean, sans-serif; "> [/u][/u][/u] <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman'" size="4;"><span style="font-size: 16px; line-height: 20px;"><span style="line-height: 16px; font-size: 13px; font-family: arial, helvetica, clean, sans-serif; ">my right hand sneaks under your shirt to feel your skin, you take your shirt off quickly, keeping no barrier between our bodies, i continue kissing you then i start kissing your lovely nick and lick it all the way while massaging your titts.[/u][/u][/u] <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman'" size="4;"><span style="font-size: 16px; line-height: 20px;"><span style="line-height: 16px; font-size: 13px; font-family: arial, helvetica, clean, sans-serif; "> [/u][/u][/u]
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| Comments to Story: Your Ideal date |
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| Moderator Join Date: Aug 2009 Location: Frolicking in the woods. Posts: 1,556
| Loving and gentle play between your characters helped me plow through the formatting problems to read your story. Your descriptive techniques are good and I loved the phrase, 'you feel my erection being jailed by my jeans' -- great image! There were a few typos that needed to be corrected, and a writer should not use texting abreviations like 'u' for you or 'r' for are. They detract from an otherwise good piece of writing. You have a lot of potential, and you need to edit your work and develop your plot a bit more. Just as I was getting going with the heat and excitement of your encounter, it ended. I hope you decide to continue with this story in a possible part two.
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| Junior Member Join Date: May 2010 Posts: 2
| thank you peppercorn i will take into consideration your notes although I am not sure why the formatting problem appeared !! |
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